Great paragraph

Tired in the morning? Students do not have enough sleep and they have to wake up too early for school. Our school needs to adjust its timetable to the new research which says that teenagers work better in the afternoon. When students and teachers wake up 6.30 in the morning they are tired and lack concentration. Teachers become tired because their job is made harder and it affects their teaching.   It affects the early lessons and how students work and concentrate. It also affects the teachers since they have to endure students lack of concentration. If you change the timetable it will make life and work easier for both teachers and students. Students and teachers will sleep more and be rested when they arrive at school which makes teaching and studying easier. Students sleep is very important and it affects every teenager’s life and all their teachers.

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(hook)Are you afraid? (intro Teenagers are becoming more afraid of each other teenagers they do not know. The media is making teenagers afraid of other teenagers.(thesis) The media portrays teenagers negatively in the media.(example) The media stereotypes teenagers as "perpetrators of crimes". (expl)The media makes teenagers look bad and make them afraid of each other because of the actions made by other teenagers.The media mostly write about crime when they write about teenagers.(conclusion) The media is a demonizing tool which is making teenagers insecure about their surroundings and wary around people they do not know

My sweet sixteen

Is this our future generation?
My Sweet Sixteen is a T.V show from America. It is a popular how about a spoiled brats sixteenth birthday.It is a bad show for teenagers. It can give ideas and opinions on how other sixteen year olds want their birthday to be like. It can make it hard for other parents to raise their children. It can have a long term effect on teenagers. It can give the teenagers watching ideas on how they want their life to be. It can give them ideas of demanding more from their parents and put pressure on parents. My Sweet Sixteen is a bad T.V show for teenagers.

Fanta and Coke paragraph

On a hot summer day, you want to be sure of the refreshment you are drinking.

Coca-cola is the world’s number one soft drink for a reason.

Coca-cola is my and most other people’s default drink.

Coke is perfect with pretty much any meal. Coke can be bought all around the world in every market.

It works to pretty much everything because it has a perfect amount of sugar which does not make it too sweet and does not make the food taste different because of the sugar. It has the perfect amount of ingredients which makes it work with almost everything. It is sold everywhere because it has become so popular that if a market does not have coca cola it is not a very good market. It would be a loss not to have coca cola because of the probable profit it would bring in to the market. Coke is the best drink for an everyday situation and can be used to most of the meal you eat everyday. It can also be bought almost everywhere which makes it not only good to almost every meal but also avalible to almost every meal.

Why would you settle for Coke when you can have a more amazing soft drink?

Fanta is more than just one of the most popular drinks in the world.

Fanta is way better than Coke.

The orange flavour makes it more refreshing. And you cannot find any website that says Fanta kills.

The orange flavor in fanta is a very popular natural flavor. Fanta is refreshing because of its naturalness and it keeps you fresh and active during the day. Unlike coca cola the Fanta does not have haters creating websites to stop fanta production. It is a safe product for you to use and fanta you do not have to be afraid to be seen with it in public. Naturally refreshing and keeps you active throughout the day. Fanta is a safe drink which you are safe to drink everwhere.